Church

nice death scene but why the the guy not at least try to stand up for the girl i havent seen the competion but this is nicecly written and I ...

if you keep going this would be just great now add some more first name basis characters and you have a great novel...if it was but longer good job

ok is the rest out yet now im curious to know what happens and who got stabbed and edited out...crap its almost as bad as Eva withdraws

i dont have a job yet but mondays should always end like that some time to relx after a hard day...i guess school would do almost the same as work

the only thing i saw through the poem was you need to cap the first letter of every line but dont trust me on that one not a poetry expert

it was good but i didn't stick with me to the end it might just be me well it probibly is just me

I felt this way about 4 months ago to bad i didnt read it then

why does every thing remind me of Eva...thats a good thing...I liked it gets to human levels and human mistakes

if only i could write poety that well...sigh...I think it speaks volumes

tell your friend it was good from Church...even though my status is quite low just leave the last part out ok

what battle are you going for or where are you trying to take this dont get me wrong I likes it war has always been my thing but what is ...

sound so much like assains creed i want to play as the templar and it was like I was in the room with them that was good

well it started off like it could go into deep sentimental stuff then left me hanging at the end with out a complete thought

you will suffer seems so fitting i mean come on

first the names because it was the last thing I read -I couldnt think of a name so I left it blank -The whole story is...well it started as something ...