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  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Clouds

    Hey Oliver! Moon here to review as you requested... First things first, I really liked your poem. It had a nice feeling to it. I loved your description, it was ...

    Sep 18, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Alone, but alive

    Happy birthday, I am quite right twenty having been cursed for this latter decade to share a date with terrorism, but no matter how long I sit and stare and ...

    Sep 13, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General
    Re: Together Again Chapter 2

    Hey! Really great. This was so hilarious... I've read the original book and I too had a 'Twilight Crazy' phase and after obsessing over the original one, when I read ...

    Sep 10, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: The Sharing In Power Chapter-2

    Hey! Rahul sorry to review this late, but I'm here now... l'm really disappointed by this chapter. When I read the edited version of the first chapter I expected this ...

    Sep 10, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: The Sharing In Power

    Hey! Rahul Your plot is good, but it’s the first sentence as Rock n' Roll Queen said that grips the reader and yours didn’t really fulfill its purpose. You really ...

    Aug 31, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: The Art Murderers Ch 7 (Edit 4)

    Hey! Joe Glad I'm the first one to review and sorry couldn't review the last two chapters, but I'm here now... So this is how it all ends! It was ...

    Aug 30, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: The Art Murderers Ch 4 (Edit 4)

    Hey! Joe, So first things first, I absolutely loved this. I just read all the four chapters straight from the beginning without a stop 'cause I couldn't stop! Dude it ...

    Aug 24, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: The Story of Casey's Life

    Hey! Lakshmi, As the story goes, the plot and message behind it was brilliant. I liked the way you narrated the whole (although short) life of a girl whose actions ...

    Aug 24, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: F.R.I.E.N.D.S.

    Hey! Justtrying, Moon here to review. First things first- the poem is really great, it has a nice feeling to it. Your starting is also good, I like the way ...

    Aug 7, 2011

  • Script » General, General
    Re: Two Weeks Notice 1.1

    Hey! Flemzo, Great work. It is my first time in critiquing a script but no worries, I've read many and acted in some of them too. I could actually picture ...

    Aug 4, 2011

  • Other » General, General
    Re: Last Convo

    Hey! That was really beautiful Price, and it was so sad. I hope you're okay... I can totally understand why you wrote this and don't worry it really doesn't suck, ...

    Aug 4, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: Without You - Chapter 2

    Hey! I just want to say that I really like the this story an the way it's going. It's really good but just one advice from me- take care of ...

    Jul 24, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: Angel Chapter 1

    Hey! Price... So your story has a lot of potential going on, great background by-the-way. I follow Islam and I know exactly what your M.C. going through, we don't have ...

    Jul 23, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Pornography Kiss (chapter 1)

    Hey! AJ I'm rooh and I'm going to be your reviewer today... I like the way you started this story, it's intense, frank and to the point. The way you ...

    Jul 22, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Rachel

    Hey! Hailstone, I'm rooh and I'll be your reviewer today. First things first, it's a great story, one of the best I've read in a long time. The twist and ...

    Jul 9, 2011


Daddy Long Legs are more closely related to crabs than spiders and somehow the idea of crablike creatures with spider legs that have escaped the entrappings of the primordial sea and now crawl over land and can walk up and down walls and ceilings creeps me more than I can adequately describe.
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