ChocolateMoonLight

Ryan ran to the door and saw the same old lady wearing the same blue dress and the same white necklace . comma “Mrs. Heckers!” (break for next line) “Oh ...

Hey! Rahul Your plot is good, but it’s the first sentence as Rock n' Roll Queen said that grips the reader and yours didn’t really fulfill its purpose. You really ...

Hey! Joe Glad I'm the first one to review and sorry couldn't review the last two chapters, but I'm here now... So this is how it all ends! It was ...

Hey! Joe, So first things first, I absolutely loved this. I just read all the four chapters straight from the beginning without a stop 'cause I couldn't stop! Dude it ...

Hey! Lakshmi, As the story goes, the plot and message behind it was brilliant. I liked the way you narrated the whole (although short) life of a girl whose actions ...

Hey! Guys, Sorry to post a chapter this late but I to address some issues. I had really messed up the time time frame so I had to do some ...

What is normal? There is no definite discussion of normal. Nobody is normal and everybody is normal. (This is getting a bit confusing...) So let's start with the meaning of ...

I think homosexuality is natural and yeah it's a choice too... It's true that if you are homosexual, you were born that way. But then again, it's all about the ...

Hey! Justtrying, Moon here to review. First things first- the poem is really great, it has a nice feeling to it. Your starting is also good, I like the way ...

The second one, the first one's good too but the second one's... I don't know, just great! :wink:

Hey! Flemzo, Great work. It is my first time in critiquing a script but no worries, I've read many and acted in some of them too. I could actually picture ...

Hey! That was really beautiful Price, and it was so sad. I hope you're okay... I can totally understand why you wrote this and don't worry it really doesn't suck, ...

Hey! I just want to say that I really like the this story an the way it's going. It's really good but just one advice from me- take care of ...

head hurts”, I yelled to the empty house. “Yeah I know, the state you were in yesterday what did you expect?” came beck a reply. I had no idea who ...

Hey! Sorry forgot to mention this before, but here it is- You don't have to break the chapter in each different scene 'cause it's a third person account and that ...