Chimaera070612

This smells like victory. I enjoyed the quick introduction to this post apocalyptic world - it seems interesting and I'm sure to follow up on it. To give some critique, ...

The general idea is quite enjoyable. A monster within, a hero on the outside. Time to be the evil critic. I didn't like the repetition of the word he as ...

Avalon was running heart in hand with blood on her torso. She was leaving a trail of blood in the shallow water that she ran through, bare-feet, alerting the predators ...

I enjoyed the poetic devices that you employed in your writing. You have a vivid sense of poetic language. The self analytical view of the story is easy to pace ...

I can say I feel genuinely empathetic towards your writing. It gives me a feeling as a person who has experienced your situations. Although the way you wrote this makes ...

I'm sorry, double post.

Avalon’s heart pulsed in anxiety. An internal instability derailed her; it was finally the day of her entry to the Arcane Covenant. She was nervous; it was a life-changing event ...