ChibiBear

Hello, this is the second chapter of my story ^^ Please critique honestly :) Word count: 1264 Chapter 2 My first thought was that he must have been joking; either ...

Your story seems very interesting so far :) Just a few nitpicky things though: And so here I am, sitting at my desk the next day Like canislupus said, the ...

I really like your story so far :) A few minor things though: She gathered her things and made her way toward s the door. The bell to the last ...

Thank you for the feedback! I'll try my best to fix this up and then maybe repost it soon :) I'm quite sure that the average human can survive for ...

I am a self-confessed anime nerd, you can probably tell by my username, and the list of animes that I've watched is endless ^^ I'm not really into the mainstream ...

Hello everyone :) This is the first chapter of a story I'm working on. The prologue was actually posted in the Action/Adventure section if you're interested, because I made a ...

I think that this story really engages the reader because it's so honest. :) I know that I can personally relate to how Chloe to some degree. Just one thing: ...

I think that this chapter is very intriguing, and makes the reader want to know more :) A few things though: “No, you’d have to exercise longer than that, Chloe. ...

Thanks guys, I'm going to fix up the last paragraph and repost it soon :) This prologue was actually a part of my chapter 1 but it didn't really seem ...

Hello everyone, I've recently started planning and writing the start of a story that seems like it could become something interesting. I'm a bit worried that I don't have the ...