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Is this about small little girls or dolls or something? If so, the concept is great because you don't often see poems on that subject. Even if it wasn't, it ...

This is the kind of poem I can relate to so well I wish I could call it mine. I also wish I could dedicate it to someone. This is ...

This was nice, but I feel guilty saying it again and again but I'm going to say it anyway. You have toooo much imagery! It's so much I'm trying to ...

I didn't get it either, but that doesn't matter. I enjoyed the poem. The rhthym was the best and I loved the third stanza and the poem's ending. Great job. ...

It was a little lengthy but I enjoyed reading it. But wouldn't this be narrative? I'm not sure. It's kind of tied in between. However, I don't think this is ...

"the colourful bracelets on her wrist, the long chunky necklace, the scars on her arms and legs. they wrap around her skin, some faded, some like ropes. " Oh, this ...

That was very nice. It sounds like something you would say about someone who died...and that makes it very powerful in my opinion. Is this poem about TYWC Piano Man?

This isn't exactly a short story. More like Chapter One to a very big book. This happens to be the shortest chapter, I think. But it's the first. Anyway, tell ...

We never have money so we never go anywhere out of Georgia unless it's like a family reunion. Usually, I just sit around do not.

Too much imagery and not enough substance.

Yeah, some of it was hard to understand. Especially the first stanza. It seemed to be kind of drifty but perhaps that's what you were going for. computer paradiso in ...

Latches onto my neck and pulls me closer to itself Until I cannot leave this sight of hopelessness This would probably look and sound better being 3 or 4 lines.

Black Daisy: Yes, He is trying to kill himself. Once again, *sighs* I don't think I made that very clear. Hekategirl: It gets hard when you try to include scripture ...

It's about people who die with no name (figuratively speaking). I have a hard time with including the definition or the point in my poems. And when I do, it ...

It wasn't so much the repition that bothered me in this poem, it was just how personal it was. Honestly, I think this belongs in the Lyric Poetry section and ...