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I wrote a song along these lines but what you've created here is of course a lot better than anything I could ever do.

Good poem. I loved the ending the most. You know, I never particularily cared for this style but you're actually pretty darn unique. I can tell that you don't allow ...

This is the best thing I have read by you! You certainly have improved since "Ghost." I loved the theme. It was so sweet and innocent. Great job.

Yep, like Jack said. Everyone has their own styles. I don't think there's anything that can be done to it, really.

"One" and "Undone" do not rhyme. "Home" and "Known"--eh, borderline--but it still doesn't rhyme. "Released" and "Peace" do not rhyme. "Happiness" and "Angels" do not rhyme and "Touched by a ...

This seems like one of those poems you hear read aloud at one of those poetry thingies. I was falling asleep until I got here: "40 paracetamol and a bottle ...

The first stanza sounded familiar. Did you have that in another poem? I loved the reference to music as Crysi said and the imagery was good as TBR said, but ...

For some reason I was able to predict what was going to happen next the entire poem. Weird... Anyway, it was pretty darn sad if you asked me even though ...

You smell like the perfume Impulsion and Caprice should be your middle name, because you're so predictably I think you should put a comma or some kind of indication at ...

Omyoghs... *Omygosh. That was...weird. I couldn't really keep up--nor did I get. Like Jack said, you try and work on making it have more sense to it.

Nate, I'll be praying for your uncles--seriously.

I never overhear anything. Perhaps it's because I never overlisten.

7/10 It's so poetic.

Watching other people be in love since I can never really understand how on earth they get that far.

Why can't I have Adobe? *sniff*