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TBR: It was ME who invited you to YWS? *Sticks out chest* *Feels Honored* But yeah. I voted "Other forum" even though I really found out about it on the ...

Eh...perhaps I will. But I've been getting lazy these days. How many pages is it and do you have to read them in order?

Well, what exactly is it about? I get the idea it's fantasy and I have never read fantasy before but I honestly don't want to jump onto the Lord of ...

It's not the easy writing with Old English but I think you did a great job. I've never been able to do this. Do you by any chance go to ...

It had a very fictional sense to it and I loved it. It would make an awesome picture book. Narrowly escaping being crushed by giant wheels. (Truckers rarely get a ...

It was short...didn't totally rhyme properly but it was okay. I didn't really get what you meant by after you write on the face of the paper it becomes the ...

Whoa the rhyming was ways off. It could have been very good if it hadn't been for that because you actually used imagery. The worse rhyming combination was "totality" and ...

Well, here we've got 92 lines of teenage angst. Some of it was just unecessary. For instance, "Big cock" in the first stanza didn't have to be there. Overall, it ...

Gosh...13? *Envious* Man, it was different but so unparalleled... "I can’t stop looking Afraid I’ll go blind I’ve never had good eyesight, and Maybe I’m missing something And maybe I’m ...

Yes, Maitre I agree...someday the site will be there.

Wow I loved this...this should be a movie. I've never read any scripts by you before but this is quite impressive. I'm sorry I'm not giving in productive critquing but ...

Whoever the guy is you wrote this for...I think you should save it for him. This poem was full of cliches that lacked imagery and for some reason, I get ...

Too me, it was merely a convesational piece. It didn't seem to be a poem. I guess ot someone else it is, but for me it wasn't. You're obviously talking ...

(My computer won't let me post it all simultaneously. It was too large) She's growing too weak, she can no longer play, Her courage surprises me even more each day. ...

My child, my angel, and still to this day, She's beautiful and perfect in every single way. Take out "single" "I cry all the time and ask God why, He ...