Chevy

molded cotton candy!

Ah, I missed the purple status. I became a moderator before VIP was created. But green's not so bad I suppose ;).

^ Likes MCR. AGH!!! *runs away*

Ok, I'm not a moderator over the Lyric Poetry section but it hadn't been done yet sooo I hope the mods over that section won't mind. Anyway, very nice song...rather ...

Chevy wakes up from a long nights rest and looks out the window. All she can see is Stars and starts singing Stars by Switchfoot. After she realizes that this ...

Psh...not the music part. Let's pray that never happens.

Lol that was really good! I wish I had had the creativity to make that.

The first two stanzas were pretty predictable. Those are the kind of lines that belong in one of those pop songs. The third stanza reminded me of Howie Day, and ...

I commented on this already via AIM but I guess I could do it again. This was perhaps the best 9/11 poem, or commentary as you called it that I've ...

I don't really care for the astericks. They seemed cheesy and made the poem a bit of a joke considering astericks is what most people us in instant message conversations ...

I agree with Chandni. It was a neat little love poem, I suppose. To be honest, I would probably like it if it was written for me. Chevy's Critiquing Scale ...

Before I ever saw what Brian said, I said the same thing. You wrote this poem with much emotion and it was done very well because you didn't go emo ...

"So bitter it tastes like sugar" Interesting analogy but it came out a little corny. "In black…not pink" I must admit, I liked this line but "And you must die ...

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"Fifteen years of lacing me up," You really built up to this line and then you just let it go. It's your best line...you would do good adding something about ...