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Whoops....never mind...ignore what I said about the nine poems...you said it's one. But it still doesn't seem to connect...are you sure this isn't nine poems?

Hm...I don't think this was one long poem. Looked like eight or nine to me. Just like you did last time, with the eleven. Why can't you just post ONE ...

I don't know if I can even make myself say something about this other than--WOW. I mean, WOW. To say I love this poem? Heh, Love is utterly an understatement.

the hideous battle going on below is you. I think "is you" should probably be at the bottom of the previous stanza. Also, the one thing this poem lacked were ...

But rather see the scars, For they're stained with my life. In my opinion, you should take out the "But." It isn't really needed. Also, stained with my life? Hm, ...

I think what got me the most was the starting of each line. Each line seemed to go into another topic. However, I know how you feel about writing something ...

Music can truly influence you when writing, which could be either a good thing or a bad thing. I think more so, of it as being a good thing, considering, ...

Hm, two word lines. I don't do this often, and I would suggest to do this either, sometimes when over used, the poem seems sliced into pieces, and not really ...

I agree with Firestarter, it was confusing. A high wind frizzled the silent woods, a gentle rush at the tall swaying branches. The sky was pale blue overhead, cloudless and ...

what exactly is it?

why does everyone seem to have an animal avator except for me? hm, who knows. anyway, at first, i didn't really understand the poem until the end of the first ...

I really liked it and all, but one question: What language?

I remain to be the hostage of your past. Should probably just be: I remain the hostage of your past. The "to be" makes it to lengthy and breaks up ...

I liked this poem. Mostly the ending. However, I think that it would sound much better if you took out some of the "Buts" and "Ands." Try reading it without ...

heh...i wish i had a middle name as simple as sarah. i mean, if i did, i wouldnt have to worry about telling the story behind my middle name every ...