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Considering your age, there isn't much I could say, but this poem does need a little bit of critiquing. Well, the main thing the poem lacked was imagery. It was ...

The way...the way...the way...the way...I must admit, this gave me a headache. Somehow, this poem reminded me of the book and movie "Seven People You'll Meet in Heaven." I have ...

pausing as they drip into oblivion for You I doubt you were talking to God, but please be aware than when you capitalize "you" it indicates you're speaking of God...I ...

I'm saying this so it can be pushed back up to the top. :lol: :twisted: Naughty Morgan :twisted:

It sounded so much like something from a book! Oh, Galatea I loved this! I have nothing else to say.

because I’m a human being and I must feel something even if its just a breeze. _____and_______ Or maybe the seasons are changing, the earth is turning, and I suppose ...

I agree with Sam (Matt Bellamy) about the brackets part...those few pieces were slightly disturbing. I liked the meaning behind this poem, but I was agitated by two things: 1. ...

I could have sworn I already commented on this...hm...I guess I'm getting old (my birthday IS tomorrow,lol) But I agree with was very hard to continue on. she wears her ...

Yeah, sometimes I think same thing about Republicans. :Very Happy: : shivers : : chokes : : dies : Well, what's wrong with republicans? Well, now that I think of ...

Well, it seems a combination of a narrative and a lyric poem you ask me--not really dramatic. But anyway, I usually have a comment or suggestion about everything that I ...

There's no place to start, Excepting the ending maybe, Where you're sure to feel the impact. There's no one to talk to, Except the tombstone maybe, But you wouldn't get ...

Okay I was pretty impressed by the first stanza and this part in particular: I see you in the shadows, I see you in my pain This part was really ...

Some people classify me as a goth...even though I don't really know how you could do that. Especially my sister. There's very few days when I wear all black, and ...

A man and a dog were going down the street, the man rode, yet walked. What was the dog's name? Now, if you can't get this, then there is a ...

journey ended After this line, the poem seemed to die. Like, all the things you had said about the emotions had been buried, so therefore, the: i remember i reflect ...