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Thank you to everyone for your remarks on this piece. I must admit, it was rather loosely written in a coffee shop. I saw an older gentleman at the counter ...

An old man is asking for regular coffee and nothing else in an independent coffee shop. He walked there after his doctor’s appointment where he is waiting for his daughter ...

Thanks for the review. I actually made an epic mistake and did not upload the latest draft. I changed the suffixes and added a few more details. It's actually a ...

"You know Frank I Think I'm supposed to say something like, 'I didn't see it coming,' but if I said that I would be lyin. Jesse hadn't been the same ...

The theme of "dried apricots" really held this poem together. I could tell that this was a heart-felt piece. A little melancholy, yes yet it wasn't intolerable. As already implied, ...

It is exactly noon and we are wrapping up. I close my notepad for lunch and the Secretary comes in and opens the blinds. I am now in the break ...

I like the use of adjectives particularly the use of colors. There was definitely a healthy balance between the "red light" and the "white light" allowing for easy subconscious comparison. ...

You have a beautiful way with words. A very conscious and observant writer and I enjoyed reading the poems that I did, particularly the first one. My only critique is ...

Darko: Thank you for the critique. This poem is meant to be a sketch-version of a narrative of some sort... It's meant to be an account of a man who ...

Shell by shell, imperfection compresses itself into mid-air. It creates a silent state of delirium throughout upstate New York. Right before human eyes, it made the front page and we’re ...

Writing!

Hey guys, thanks for the reviews. Perhaps I should have named this "wine skins" for it's about the place in between the grape vineyard and the wine itself, and the ...

Don't you believe that there is in man a deep so profound as to be hidden even to him in whom it is? -St. Augustine

Liking the theme here. The preface to the poem really does help with the poem itself. I suppose I read it reader-responsively considering my sister once suffered with a severe ...

sympathy for a machine's sudden death and a blow to the head I don't know now plaid shirts, a hurricane in my mouth brings a long awkward pause no thought ...