ChernobyllyInclined

Thanks so much, both of you, for the reviews! I edited it a little and I hope I've implemented some of your suggestions, for they were all very helpful. Thanks ...

Yeah, yeah.

parley or parsley or whatever

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i put fire on you

I knew I was doing that. I could tell. I just didn't know how acute it was. I might just throw that one out - of the contest, I mean ...

Not sure what this. Used it for another contest but changed it around a little for this. I think the one above is in competition with this one but since ...

Oh no! .........Oh no! ..........Oh no! This could be bad.

This was definitely better. The characters were much more vivid and I like the funny dynamic. I also liked the description that you did put in, it was good. My ...

A fourth? They've all been angry and sad and lonely. I believe this one may be less so. At least I hope it is. The word is, 'odd'. Bastards ‘I ...

Honestly, (in an un-Ethan fashion) I couldn't find a better critique under the Misty Mountains with Gollum lording over it like a little advertisement for modern warfare. This is the ...

Third one! This is actually a small excerpt from another story. But it works fine for this. The word is 'dishes'. It's a little short so if anyone has any ...

I don't know what to do with this stupid story! Thanks for the feedback. And I know what you're talking about but I can't seem to fix it. Whenever I ...

Ah, now to the next. And it is late, yes. 'Bleach' is the word. Holy Folly The woods were thin. Trees tilted and broken stood at unnatural angles and the ...

You need to space the paragraphs. Its really hard to read when they're all stuck together like that. PM when you fix it and I will be glad to give ...