Charmgirl1995

Okay, I think that this prologue is amazing! It left me wanting to read more and more. I did not see any mistakes, which shows me you put a lot ...

I really liked this! When I was reading the first few lines, I thought that this guy was just crazy and really evil, but as your piece went on, his ...

Ok, I like the begining and how you compare their hair and eyes. Nice job on the peer pressure thing. But you need to tell me why they were going ...

This is a letter your writing. To me, it sounds more like your writing a story. As I looked around, I noticed a look of despair on a boy's face. ...

Your story is intresting. I like how it pulls you in, the cliff hanger at the end was a good idea. Well done. I can't wait to read the next ...

This is an emotional poem that has feeling. Your rhyme scheme is good and you do an incredible job with it. Well done.

Ok, I think you should make Bellatrix a little more vain because thats how she is. And elaborate some more because I really want to read this story!!!

Hey everyone. I'm new here and I really like to write and critique many peoples writing. Elinor Brynn is my friend and she introduced me to this site. Besides writing ...