CharlotteChambers

Hey c: The tubes are explained further into the book when people start asking questions about them. The true reason he has them is just a field of spoilers, and ...

I'll see what I can do in the opening chapters with your advice. I assure you it does get more interesting (and hopefully original) later on in the story, and ...

I definitely will review some other peoples' work soon!

Thanks for the advice. :D I have already gotten to work on those mistakes in wording, and making things make sense. Hehe. Now . . . The thing about the ...

Excellent tips and advice. I'll get to work on that now. I actually noticed the issue with the word "deck" being repeated a couple of times, and I meant to ...

You just made my night. LOL