Charllotte4

I love the way you intergrated everything. It flowed very well! I entered too, and out of the few I've read I think this is the most original... I think ...

My favourite part: I'm strugglingagainst manacles,which bind meand render me helplessas the earth splits apartfrom in front of me,craggy and uneven,secluding Mom and Ion our own little island. I actua

I really like this song, overall it's very good. Your grammar does appear a little bit awkward in places, and your use of words could be simplified for a better ...

WOW! This is really good. You have a creative imagination and your grammar seems in order. I love it because you captivated me as a reader and enticed me to ...