CharityDawn

So sad! These things happen realistically, so I really admire your writing for that. I didn't quite get the 'Boom ba bang' beat thing, I would love to hear this ...

This is really sad. I'm not sure if the girl is talking to her mom and her mom just isn't responding... or if she's just leaving voice-mail after voice-mail. Either ...

You had me intrigued with your story, the rain falling, perfect mascara dripping, phone ringing and ringing... I thought it was beautiful. Until you started talking about how you were ...

Gosh Zeke, Those first two reviews were harsh and even cruel. It isn't meant to be a short story, just a preview of a story you're working on. So, I ...

This is a really good beginning to a story, I enjoyed it, and you have me intrigued to hear the rest! I thought your character development was very interesting, and ...

This is a very good story! I love how you created the two perspectives to give the story more angles. I love the message about self-discovery revealed in such a ...

This shows potential! It's the type of story that had me wondering what was coming next up until the last sentence. It was unclear, giving me a foggy sort of ...