Chadwick

Wow I realy like it! I do think bigbadbear was right when he said the vine part was to short add more detail. Oh and a LOVE the part after ...

I love it! Its very very real. I could easily see it. I think everyone got most of the errors

Sweet! Thank you for takeing the time to edit this. I've changed a lot of stuff in it, if someone finds something that needs to be changed please tell me. ...

That had a lot of emotion in it, I liked it. I would repeat Understanding the truth of it all Understanding what you really love Understanding how you really feel ...

Wow, that was amazing, you defiantly brought feeling into the story. I was pulled into your world only to find that it stopped. I cant wait for the next chapter! ...

I'm with kittykat the poem is great just as it is, the only thing I would do is add more to it! Its short and sweet but a couple lines ...

Bye Bye.

That defiantly caught my attention. I liked the way you made the orphanage foreign, evil, and sad. You put it together from a child’s perspective making everything seem “simple” but ...

Very thoughtful, personally I didn't see anything wrong with the first verse. It sounded good to me. I can relate to this very well, Good job! Chadwick