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  • Short Story » Fanfiction, Romantic
    Re: Untitled RenjiKuya FanFic

    Whoa, did not expect this. lol Anyways, the overall story is good and you used some very nice vocab in there like 'tantalizingly', etc. Nice description on the M scene ...

    May 5, 2012

  • Poetry » General, Other
    Re: The Industry Of Gore.

    Oh wow. You should meet Fleet (xxFleetingEternity, I mean) :P You guys have a lot in common. Anyways, love how you started. The whole "squishy, mooshy, lovey-dovey crap" part was ...

    Apr 1, 2012

  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Dramatic
    Re: Thoughtless Chapter II

    Same reviewing format: - second bed? Who else sleeps there? - so in the dream, is the raven Katatshi? -love the word 'orbs' for 'eyes' for some reason - the ...

    Mar 31, 2012

  • Short Story » Horror, Dramatic
    Re: Infatuation

    This is all jumbled up (I write down thoughts/comments as I go), but its in order :) - in all honestly, reluctant to read this... - The tense changes from ...

    Mar 24, 2012

  • Short Story » Humor, Teen Fiction
    Re: Why me...

    Haha, I have to say I love your writing style :) Okay anyways, I suggest you space out your paragraphs (like double 'enter' instead of just once) and check your ...

    Mar 21, 2012

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: does anyone know her?

    I actually really like this poem because unlike most poems (which I spend a long long time trying to figure out the meaning), it's straightforward, and easy read and yet ...

    Mar 18, 2012

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Doll Sweet Night

    You've got a couple of nice phrases in there like "shun", "cruel" and my favourite "sweet bitter sweet tears." I think you can really use with some commas thrown in ...

    Mar 18, 2012

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Lyrical
    Re: Skeleton Key

    This is a really nice little piece here. I like how the whole poem is a metaphor. Its pretty straightforward and doesn't go off the tracks so good job there ...

    Mar 18, 2012

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: This Is My December

    Wow, this is really good. I've read a lot of poetry lately and though I'm not an experienced poet (or a poet at all...) this is cryptic yet understandable to ...

    Mar 18, 2012

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Deleted

    The word choice is really nice, especially the verbs (e.g. "drown the sun"). Like the others said, its hard to tell what this is really about. First theres was and ...

    Mar 18, 2012

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Horror
    Re: deleted

    I've been typing this while I read so they'll be all over the place, but in order: 1). The sentence "Where are the kids flying on their bikes down the ...

    Mar 18, 2012

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General

    Um, how thoughtful. Did you put a few spaces in before the "=" ? Thats creative. Maybe write a little more next time. ;)

    Mar 18, 2012

  • Lyrics » Realistic, Other
    Re: Paranoid Schizophrenic's Lullaby

    I simply love the last stanza. It really wraps the whole thing up and leaves the reader with a chilly feeling. Anyways, just one thing, when you said, "return with ...

    Mar 18, 2012

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