Celticmelody

Truly, we are ignored Often we have implored Nobody seems to care We hardly think it fair Our cries are never heard Not one ever is perturbed And everyday, To ...

I thought your imagery was really beautiful. I had to read this poem twice to understand what it was talking about. You have great rhymes, and the whole piece flows ...

Let me know if any of the changes I made help a little. I really want to get this poem right because it is one of my personal favorites. Punctuation, ...

This poem really makes me stop and think. It seems in this mordern day and age we hardly ever sit down and talk anymore. I love how you leave the ...

Your word choice is amazing. I suggest removing the braces and the exclamation point in (but never for too long!). Also, you start off with a rhyme, but then it ...

This is my second post, I've tried adding more punctuation. My first poem Flowing Swiftly had very little if any punctuation. Please give me any advice for improvement. Thanks.

I see myself through a haze, indistinct, a warped projection. As if I'm staring into a pool disturbed by a skipping stone. Or in a shiny metal mirror, cracked and ...

Thank you for the advice. This is my first post and I really do appreciate it. I had to do this poem from memory last year, and I think the ...

I like your poem, it expresses your opinions. I see how a sword can cleave one's life apart, through grief. Keep writing.

I love the poem. It's very expressive, and much better than any that I will post. I love the word choice as well. Already I am evaluating my own writing ...

The current never stops Down the mountainside A rock is carried Until it comes to rest At the bottom of a pool The water travels on Dancing, Singing New yet ...