Catriona

Now I think that this is really a very good basic idea for a poem, and I love the possiblilities of where it could go, but the main problem that ...

Well this really isn't a poem (ok, it isn't a poem at all) it's more like a quote or something. It's really pretty, and could be a good idea for ...

Sorry Adrian, but I disagree with your saying the structure is "boring". Yes, it may not be the best or anything but I happen to like it, I found it ...

First of all, I would suggest trying non-rhyming poetry. Rhyming may seem easier but often takes much out of the poem where free verse is more, well, free. A display ...

Wow, this was really good!! I loved how you started each section then described it, and this one was just outstanding!! I am a glass girl, blunt words from a ...

Well it's mainly the first stanza that I'm unhappy with, not really sure why, just seems a little lacking. But thank you very much!!!!

Ok, I'm not really sure why, but I really dislike this... so go forth and critique, thank you =) These self-built walls of uncertainty and denial Persist in housing me ...

These self-built walls of uncertainty and denial Persist in housing me in my tiny box; so small, Its cramped space leaves me sore, and alone My ransom posted on the ...

Oooh thank ye! Hmm now any suggestions on improvements/changes? I only rewrote it once before posting it here, but I only changed punctuation. Any more comments are greatly appreciated!!

Just so you know I don't want to get freaked at for mentioning God in this, I like it that way and am keeping that line... so go on and ...

Thanks a bunch you guys... ok here is what I did with it the other night, still a crappy poem but I think it's better I don't know... haha (oh ...

ok first of all I want to note, I KNOW that this sucks, it needs more imagery, and blah blah blah. Don't tell me what's wrong with it, tell me ...

Ok this was my first attempt at writing lyrics, and I'm not liking it very much... help please. Verse one: I’m lost in this world, alone and afraid I want ...

That was pretty good. I like how you were slightly (lack of a better word) random (if you get how I mean it) with your rhyming. It seemed in a ...

Thank you SOOOOO incredibly much you guys!!!! I'll continue to work on it!!!! (here's the newly revised version) I think I must be like her; Delicate, patient, pleasant, She’s never ...