Catfood

Only a soldier, Whose tears left unshed, Stronger than the battalion, For which he has led. Someone's dear son, Or maybe a daughter, Each man they have lost, They fight ...

That was profound enough, I'd say. To quote the first two up there not at all in the likeness of a seventeen year old. Nicely done. I wonder if its ...

Funny I guess. But there were a lot of mistakes. Grammatical and spelling wise. Next time use spell check. I kept my attention at the end, but since its not ...

Usually you hear nothing else but love when people write poetry, but it was very personal and not at all cliche. I liked it very much. I think you should ...

Yayish. Someone shares my views on this subject. You have a way with words. I like the message. And the previous comment makes a good point; you did capture the ...

Smart and clear point. I like the message.

That was really powerful. Great job. I loved the repetition. It gave it a good theme. I actually thought it would be hard to follow if it didn't have something ...

I can understand the imperfection part; finding yourself in Bella. But I know I would have resented it or just would have stopped reading it at book 2 chapter 3 ...

Screenplays have never really been my thing ( It must be the way they're written), but I really enjoyed that. Everything was well described. It really did feel like a ...

It's NEARLY done yet, but I wanted to know what people thought of it so far. Apocalypse: a revelation; the expectation of an imminent cosmic cataclysm in which God destroys ...

Okay, the ending was a little long, but all in all I like the message. I didn't get the "A voice that turned into a million voices," part. Do you ...

I think this is my favorite poem so far. No one I've seen has talked about God. Or they have but they have included His name, instead of leaving it ...

I like the word variation and the expression, but it was a little hard to follow. All I was able to decipher was that you are kind of barely holding ...

The punctuation was so-so, but I liked the description. If it wasn't 200 degrees in my house, I would have believed I was outside, enduring cold winds. GREAT -catfood

I'd keep going with it. Maybe if you take more time to make descriptions of the journey, that don't include, dark and darkness, but other things that aren't really expected, ...