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Re: Banana Bread Pudding
This is fascinating. I like it because it's quirky and different. You're not going off on some crazy grand theme (I mean, poems that do that are great, but variety ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: Serving For You
I think this is an excellent start. You clearly have a solid theme and message that you want to communicate, and the theme by itself is powerful. You have a ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: Cathedral
The hush of holiness entombed within this dome where pageantry and faith have wed. This cup of blood, atonement shed for sin; the candles burn remembrance for the dead. A ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: A Pretty Monster
I was definitely feeling it. Partly, it's because I can sympathize--my sister's one of my best friends now, but for a long time I struggled trying to measure up to ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Road to Recovery
This was a really good piece, I vastly enjoyed reading it. Two thoughts as far as critique: 1. The nitpicky details - the word "risking" in paragraph 6 seemed to ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Threads and strands
Life is formed by threads and strands To try to walk them is to fall. I'm broken but I'm in Your hands I trust that You can hold it all. ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Wakeup Call
Hey, great job! I really liked the raw, but controlled emotion in the poem. You do the stream-of-consciousness thing well and I can tell you've been writing for awhile. There ...
Jul 11, 2011 -
Re: Poet's soul
White sunlight peaks above the windowsill Onto the pages of the book she drinks. In breathless reverie she sits until The story's close--her heart within her sinks. What beauty lies ...
Jul 11, 2011 -
Re: I walk alone
I really do like this. The imagery is beautiful and the way you cast your subject matter is haunting. I also like the way you repeat the title phrase, it ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: Dreams
The short version is that the first stanza needs work, but the second and third stanzas are really quite good. I'm really quite impressed, actually, by how strongly you came ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: Ode to a Bat
Creature of darkness and terror of night, Who dances in deepening, purple twilight, Who hunts on the wings of the starry expanse And clutches the dusk in a death-lock romance. ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: Alabama August
Wow. First of all, can I just say how underqualified I feel to even review this? This was amazing. The descriptions and tone are perfect. You nailed the voice of ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Im not sure where this came from me.
Great job! There was something in this I found captivating. The critique: The other reviewers were correct in that it would be a lot stronger if it were less general. ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Ink
I absolutely love the imagery here. It did take me a couple reads to get it (I had to connect "ink" to "black" before I understood the line about the ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Road signs
A familiar sign flashed past. “Hartline – 5 miles.” Lydia rolled down her car window and let the prairie wind rustle her hair. Memories seemed to close in on her. ...
Jul 1, 2011
