CastlesInTheSky

Eoghan from the XFactor! *squee* He was adorable! I shall love your character forevermore. On with the critique. :wink: I'm kind of doing these chapters back to front, but oh ...

Hi there, Blink! So sorry about the wait. :D The colours attracted, drawing Logan’s eyes open. 'The colours attracted' sounds somewhat detached, because you aren't really using the verb in ...

Hi, If you are even looking at this I bless you. I am entering a contest and I have to print off everything in one day. I really want another ...

Everyone seems to hate Charles Dickens! :smt010 *bursts into uncontrollable tears* So, I adore Thomas Hardy , especially for Tess of the d'Urbervilles. Charlotte Bronte , because she wrote Jane ...

Ahh! Jane Eyre by Charlotte Bronte Tess of the d'Urbervilles by Thomas Hardy Wuthering Heights by Emily Bronte [though I doubt anyone could love it more than Kirsten :wink:] Rebecca ...

Oooh, I really do adore this chapter. I just bobbed out from nowhere; I haven't critiqued the other parts as I'm too immersed in this to be of any assistance. ...

Here as requested, Duc! :D It is strange that the things we remember from our childhood are so often the things that determine the adults we have become. I think ...

Hey there! :wink: Chapter 8's nitpicks had been covered by your other readers, so I skipped ahead to this chapter, I couldn't resist. So far, I've critiqued all the chapters ...

Hi Angel! :D Yes, finally some conflict. I found this chapter beautifully written and it has improved in leaps and bounds from your last writings, which I found slightly passive, ...

Hey there, yukis! Before you submit a piece of work, it's common courtesy to edit for mistakes. I noticed not all the proper nouns are captalised, some of the words ...

Hey there, poppy! :D I'm Sarah and I'll be your reviewer for today. Ben shrugged and sat beside on the bench, Insert 'me' after 'beside.' “Cause you know what real ...

Hey there dusty, and welcome to YWS! :D The rules over here are that your reviews-posts ratio should be 2:1. In normal English, it basically means that for every piece ...

Here I am again - Yay! :D First to review. I Anyway, I love this style of writing. It is very refreshing, and I love the modern gothic style you ...

Hey there, Sara! [name stealer!:P] Squall, Demeter and Lily have managed to point out all the nitpicks I wanted to say, so I'm sorry about that. I do think a ...

Ah, here again. I'm not up to doing a line by line critique,because my fingers are numb, and anyway, this looks to have all the nit-picks smoothed out, so far. ...