CaseySaz

It's cute. I like your style but it can get tiresome. I don't think you should use that style through out the whole story. Maybe you could just use it ...

I like it, its cute. Your writing is very detailed-maybe a little too detailed. It can get teadious to read when you put all those lond descriptions in. Try shortening ...

Feel free to tear it to shreds -------- In Whittsdale, Nebraska, there is a school, and in this school there is a bathroom. Typically, students attending this school will use ...

That was really great, I loved it. A few things kind of sound un-realistic though. I don't understand why his parents were hesitant to let he go to the park ...

I've got to fix the beginning, it stinks. The latest copy is at my moms house so I'll fix it up later.

I loved it. Your characters are very strong. I would recomend to cut a little of the joikng around between the two, it does little to advance the plot line. ...

I liked it, but I think that the mother is a bit extreme. Let her show her hatred in more discreet ways, like I don't know, selling her belongings on ...

I was in the midst of learning about cellular respiration as the world as I knew it shattered to pieces, both literally and figuratively. I heard scattered shrieks and cries ...

I really liked it. I would like to know more about the man who is chasing her and why this is going on. Is this happening because she is exceptionaly ...