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Re: Destiny -- A Harry Potter short story
Hello This was fairly-well written and I would be interested in seeing what would happen afterwards. The style was fairly appropriate but strangely passive in my opinion for Hermione. I ...
Jun 29, 2008 -
Re: Elements chapter 1
Hello The other reviewers have already said quite a lot, haven't they? My only additional suggestion would be to inject a sense of 'action' into the story. There is more ...
Jun 29, 2008 -
Re: Author's Fantasy
Hello The whole piece has a very loose, introspective feel to it. However, the first half of the story (aliens) does not connect readily to Maro. Some more plot is ...
Jun 29, 2008