CainWalker

Hello This was fairly-well written and I would be interested in seeing what would happen afterwards. The style was fairly appropriate but strangely passive in my opinion for Hermione. I ...

Hello The other reviewers have already said quite a lot, haven't they? My only additional suggestion would be to inject a sense of 'action' into the story. There is more ...

Hello This does sound like a big trap for repetition/old story, mostly because it revolves around ideas that have already been overdone pretty much everywhere. (Moving, tension with family, hormones..

Hello The whole piece has a very loose, introspective feel to it. However, the first half of the story (aliens) does not connect readily to Maro. Some more plot is ...