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Re: Even When You Died
Hello there. :) Nice title. :smt023 It's catchy. Nitpicks: When you screamed, I loved you. When you lied, I loved you. When you punished, I loved you. I still love ...
May 15, 2011 -
Re: Brokenhearted
Hello there. :) I actually am not good with making good reviews when the piece is this short and when there is nothing much to nitpick xD, so I don't ...
May 15, 2011 -
Re: Look, Ma
Hello there. :) Nitpicks: Look Ma, it's your grandson . . . - There should be a comma before 'Ma'. In the title too. - Strictly speaking, there shouldn't be ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: My Daddy, The General
Hello there! :) Nice title. :smt023 Nitpicks: Yes, sir! I'll do the dishes, Though my eyelids are heavily laden With wishes of sleep. - First of all, this a nice ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: First kiss
Hello there. :) I've got nitpicks for you: The moonlight shone down onto her pale, beautiful face. Her firm jaw framing her perfect smile. - I'm not really good with ...
May 14, 2011 -
Re: Inspiration and Writer's Block
Hello there! :D I've got a few nitpicks for you: I can't talk, I can't listen, I must write, write, WRITE! - I think this line will feel stronger if ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: You
Hello there. :) Nitpicks: With you I have to decipher, I have to decipher. - Put a comma after 'you'. Also, I'm not sure if the repetition of the 'I ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Dylan, I Hardly Knew Ya
Hello there! :D Nitpicks: I stood in the empty field, looking out to the sun setting over the horizon. The red blazing ball of gas was bleeding into the sky. ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Friendship
Hello there. :) I've got nitpicks for you: Lies, secrets, gossip. Are these the words you connect with friendship? - Nice opening. :smt023 I also like the rhyming of 'gossip' ...
May 10, 2011 -
Re: Are you rejecting me?
Hello there. :) I've only got two nitpicks for you: How dare you say I am not fit To love someone like you? Is there a vital thing I’ve missed ...
May 10, 2011 -
Re: Fragile
Wow, this was surprisingly short. xD This is like the shortest poem I've ever read as far as I can remember. But you did a nice job. :smt023 :D The ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: Spiral-Horned Dragon Head Portrait
You did an epic job! :D :smt023 All the details are so vivid and clear. I so cannot make a constructive review on this lol. And I'm not experienced with ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: The YWS Ship
Nice drawing! :D :smt023 I actually don't have much to say. >.< I can hardly find anything wrong with it. I'm not experienced with visual arts though (so I can't ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: Winterland
Hello there. :) Nitpicks: A world of Ivory Is yet to unfold. Waiting patiently For it to be told. - I like this beginning. :smt023 It's simple, yet inviting. :) ...
May 6, 2011 -
Re: My Dear Person
Hello there. :) Nitpicks: “You only believe because, they tell you to.” No, dear person, that would make me a hypocrite. - I love the attitude of the persona. xD ...
May 6, 2011
