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The exaggerated description made me laugh, but other than that, this poem accomplishes very little. It contains few of the things good poetry ought to have. BUT it's okay to ...

I'm not really sure what to think of was enjoyable to read. I think you have a way with rhythm (I think of song lyrics) and an ability to create ...

I also think ending on "Pointlessness" was very, very weak. I like where "dust, destiny and" was going but then I felt let down by that word. Ooh, good point, ...

Imagery is definitely an issue here. There are a lot of poems about dreaming out there, and ninety percent have the title DREAMING or DREAM. Try going for something more ...

I can't say I liked this as much as gummy, but I'm impressed by your imagery; it's lovely. The highway is a blur, rain-washed marker on a paper one shade ...

This certainly isn't your best work, but it sure ain't bad. I only have a few complaints: imprint on my soul This phrase makes me want to bang my head ...

XD It's running on the love of hopeful writers everywhere! *silence* I agree with Clau!! Like Albus Dumbledore, YWS is never truly dead so long as those here are loyal ...

Men are, more often than not, complete morons. Don't rush into a relationship unless you know what you're getting into. I went out with this guy freshman year and it ...

Welcome, Gra! Ooh, this is like having an exchange student on YWS. I can count to six in French! WHOOHOO! Can't wait to see you around, and welcome to the ...

So the site is existing, but no one knows why or how? YWS must have a mind of its own....

How do you discipline a bot, I'm wondering?

It's clever that you worked in all the references to songs and bands, but as poetry, it's not really striking me as anything fantastic. It seems like you were working ...

I've seen a lot of your work springing up around here...remember that you ought to critique others' work as well as post your own. People will be more likely to ...

I can't say I liked this as much as Clau did...it's a little too straightforward and telling for my taste. Of course, a flat tone and straightforward manner add to ...

I agree with the others; pitter-patter ought to go at both ends, and "there're" is such a bizarre contraction, so leave it at "there are." The poem is pleasant and ...