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I agree with the others. (Basically, I bow down to Snoink.) Your poem came off just plain flat; I want to care, but I can't really find a reason to. ...

Thanks, Snoink! I think I've got dimensional analysis down, but now I'm angry at vectors...we'll see how that works out. :wink:

I think this poem was hurt by the assignment it was written for. As a general rule, if you're making a metaphor about life, DO NOT say, "Life is like ...

*blushes* Thanks, Clau.

Thanks, Snoikus, and gosh-do-I-know what you're talking about, Evangelina. I figured it out with the help of the blessed internet this morning, and I just want to make sure I ...

Alright! So, the breeching didn't kill me--I actually liked the poem a lot. It wasn't the best but it was certainly a new take on the idea, and had a ...

We're on the very first chapter of the textbook, going over dimensional analysis and conversions, and I'm already in trouble over the homework. Could you give me a hand with ...

Beautiful and simple lyrics; I think I could give a better crit, but I want to hear the whole thing, and your link isn't leading me to the recording. :( ...

The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug. -Mark Twain Nothing is more important in your writing than ...

Description. You definitely have a gift for creating images, but I felt that the rest of the poem was lacking. Beautiful images cannot make up for a lack of significant ...

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I applaud you for taking on the challenging form that is the sonnet, but I agree with Brad in that it wasn't done brilliantly. I think you need to weed ...

This one needs so much revision you may just need to toss it and start over. I found almost nothing poetic about this; it's interesting subject matter, but I'm afraid ...

*applauds*

It's a sweet poem (sweet as in, awww), but you need to talk less about what the bench looks like and more about what it means to the speaker of ...