Cade

*dies laughing* Oh, Nate, I have nothing but praise. Actually, I have one suggestion. Put the prefix "Poke-" in front of more words. :) Oh, and maybe you should address ...

Changed it on a whim; I like it. Still like "cadmium" just shorter! So, Cade here, formerly cadmium and still Colleen. :D

Oh, I agree with Clau. This made me laugh; I'm anti-chatspeak or whatever-speak-that-is-not-real-English-speak, and I love how you incorporated that into a satirical piece. It was also effective to ha

I really enjoyed reading this; it's a great metaphor and you expressed it nicely. I just see two problems with it; it's taken too far, and I don't think you ...

I really your basic idea here and the way you've presented numbers...especially 1.618, because isn't that the number that is the ratio of all these things in nature to all ...

Warts. (and there is nothing wrong with going from Avada Kedavra to puppies...:) :()

Puppies. :D

I see what you're saying with the metaphor troubles. I agree with Razorblade; it's as though you've shoved the metaphor in the reader's face. And the line "You kill the ...

Haha, I love to take pictures of my cat, too. She really likes to get up and nuzzle the camera, though, so I don't always get the best shots. The ...

I like it, Brad. Good job expressing a lot in such a short space. Diction. the last such delicate world to be controlled by my fingers. Here, I would ditch ...

This definitely interests me, and I'd like to know more about your protagonist, Naomi. Good prologue--and I like the picture you included! Characters. Maybe you ought to get out in ...

9/10.

Very is a bad word to use in writing. As Mark Twain said, "Substitute 'damn' every time you're inclined to write 'very'; your editor will delete it and the writing ...

It's like an explosion of green! Congrats, guys!

Abracadabra.