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Cal makes a fine point. In poetry, you should try to refer to the "narrator" of the poem as the "speaker", not as "you" as if you were referring to ...

Granted, but now you're allergic to brownies and other delicious baked goods. I wish my neck didn't hurt.

It's coming here later this year, and I'm totally going to see it. :D

Agree with Perra--that page should have a rules link or short blurb. Naw, I like it better the old way! Though I do like that it's all wider now. :D

*jumps up and down* This fellow is my new best friend.

8/10 KITTIES! But it could do without the numbers.

I agree with Suzanne. This poem doesn't really offer much; it's just a few simple sentences. With line breaks. And you will soon learn that poetry is not made by ...

"Emo" and "sad" are two very different things. Sad or dark work is depressing, is meant to be upsetting or melancholy. "Emo" is a slang term that connotes something more ...

Granted, but one day the Stunt Doubles' Union goes on strike and you have to do your own stunts and you die.

*headdesk* Cute sentiment, but not best expressed here. To me this seems much more like a middle school student ranting about math--believe me, I know the feeeling. But it was ...

*sings* This is a song that never ends, it goes on and on my friends! Um. Anyway. To be quite honest, this poem does not speak to me. It seems ...

:shock: Quite a critique for such a short poem there, Suz. She's probably covered most of what I would have, but I'll spit out a few things here... I do ...

Oh, it's lovely! The area around the eyes is a little busy...but this is one of those pieces that makes me jealous of others' talent. Remember to review some other ...

MadHatter, please refrain from expressing your social and political opinions when commenting on a piece in the literary forums. :wink: Not realistic at all (not the gay part, the actually ...

Cliche. This poem's main problem is that it lacks originality. If your goal is to write a bad pop song, then congratulations. But if your goal was to write poetry ...