Cade

I smiled as I woke this morning because I remembered the way you asked me to dance last night in the sweaty school gymnasium. That same song was playing, the ...

You have an interesting premise here; I definitely know what you're talking about because I moved from a rural area to the suburbs when I was ten. You have some ...

...I, too, went "FTW!" the second I saw this. My main problem with this poem is that it doesn't sound like a poem. It sounds like prose. What's worse, it ...

It's fascinating to write a piece centered around dialogue, as you've done here. With a piece about a phone call, what else could you do? Dialogue. It should be realistic, ...

Well, it's cute, as CK Lynn so elegantly stated. It is childish, and that sort of sets me off. As Suzanne said, it's very simple; it doesn't really go past ...

Yeah, it's called slant rhyme, and it is a gift from the heavens.

FISHIES FTW.

Music.

1. Rats 2. Snakes

Pharoah.

Hmm...I'm not entirely sure what the purpose of a half-script, half prose piece with eight lines is. Plot. I don't really...understand what's going on? I sense the tension between stepfather ...

I do not put line breaks where I pause (unless the line breaks between sentences). That's what punctuation is for. See, when you read poetry aloud, you disregard the line ...

I agree, it does seem sort of stiff. Harry seems so distant and out of character; everything moves along so quickly, too. It isn't like JKR's writing at all; though ...

Hey, Insomniac. I'm not going to reiterate everything Suzanne just said, but I would if I was really bored, because her advice is excellent. Your biggest problem is that the ...

I think this could be a really funny humor piece if you took the rant aspect out of it. For now, keep it in your personal journal. Right now, it's ...