Cade

Hey there...you seem to be new, so I'll make sure you're informed about some of our rules here on YWS. I see that you've posted a lot of new stuff, ...

I also think Sureal has an interesting point, though I haven't seen any "oh noes! teh ghey!" yet. It's more ammunition for the anti- Potter folks, but it's not like ...

Y'all are losers. I write in seventeenth perspective. Take THAT, Pat.

Um...back on topic... One of the issues I saw brought up in the News forum was, "Should Rowling have revealed it or kept it to herself?" I think the knowledge ...

The way you compared the telephone and the clock was interesting, but the rest of the poem doesn't really go anywhere. It seems to much like a stream of consciousness ...

On the subject of cliche: "Cliche" does not necessarily mean "something we can all relate to." It means "tired, repetitive, meaningless because it's been in use forever, printed thousands of ...

This is manages to tell a story from a child's point of view without being completely obvious or annoyingly childish. Your main problem is just rhythm. I'm not going to ...

But if Dumbledore was a mentor who was going to save you from an evil Dark Lord, why on earth would his sexuality matter? I dunno about you, but Dark ...

Hmm...interesting stuff, but I think you could definitely "juice" it a little bit. Right now it's very stream-of-consciousness-ish, and reading such a poem becomes boring for a reader. The best ...

I am a fan. *huggles A Wrinkle In Time*

The execution seems to me as though you wrote a story and arbitrarily hit the 'Enter' key as you went along. Brutally honest as Brad's comments are, I'm going to ...

This is cliche to the point that I feel I've read it before. In email chain letters..."Oh, those were the days. *place cliche images of childhood here* Ooops, and then ...

Punctuation in poetry is a matter of personal choice, though too often amateur writers take this to mean, "Why, be lazy! Do not punctuate your poems!" Usually, it's a good ...

Erm...it's cute, but pretty childish. I find it darn near impossible to take seriously. The colors don't help either. One is Red and one is blue, The yellow one just ...

Thanks for adding in the translation--it makes a lot of sense now and it's not so distracting for those of us who don't know any French. It's a neat idea, ...