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Thinking of William Tell, Suzie? 10/10, yours are always lovely.

10/10 I love it!

Hmm...it's a little flat. It begins with the simile being laid out there, right at the beginning, speaker = Mediterranean Sea. The rest of the poem only serves to make ...

I like the idea, but the style of the poem itself is very drifty and disconnected, with just short sentences and phrases strung together without any punctuation. It's very straightforward, ...

(Sheesh, Suzanne, why do you even bother? Your worthless words should not even be in the mere presence of my work. I hope your computer dies and you can't get ...

I agree with Suzie. It's boring to read poems that go along the lines of "_____ is like _____", i.e. the classic "Life is like a box of chocolates" or ...

Oh, Creative Writing... Imagery. If any poem needs it, this one does. Right now, the setting of the poem is a little ambiguous. Yes, a forest...with some water? But that's ...

'Tis rather a stream of consciousness, as the title says. There are some great images in here, but it doesn't really form a coherent, meaningful poem. I think you would ...

I'm having quite a bit of trouble with this little bugger. I feel like there's something missing, and that the second stanza is a little messy. Please help me clean ...

You have such lovely eyes!

This one is me and my cousin at our family reunion. We both look scary because it was very hot outside and we had been eating sugar. These are my ...

Urgh...sorry, I was writing my critique and Internet Explorer decided to spaz, and now I must rewrite it. That's okay, though, because it was fairly short. On the subject of ...

I really enjoyed this. Fantastic job with imagery, and with making your rhyme nice and subtle. San Francisco mist in morning over the trees in Golden Gate park carries over ...

(On a writing-related tangent, Dumbledore's outing really made me think about how characters become like people. He's not really being reported on as a character, but almost as a person ...

You've given someone a poem as a birthday present. Either with or without their request for you to do so. I've totally done that. ...your chemistry notebook is half verse. ...