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Hmm. I find this piece very intriguing and, in some places, beautiful, but I feel as though it might have too much "poetry bling," for lack of a better phrase, ...

So it turns out I randomly write fiction once in a while. Enjoy? -- Roy lived alone in a third-floor apartment overlooking the narrow city street below. The apartment was ...

The sentence you gave as an example is, as Melja pointed out, incorrect. It's called a comma splice if that's what you're looking for. Good luck! -Colleen

This sort of thing has been seen a million times over. "Boohoo, I have writer's block, there are thousands of emotions trying to claw their way out of me!" Make ...

I like seven and four the best. The color in one was nice, but you could have brought it out more. Sunrise/sunset pictures never really appeal to me that much, ...

Yes, very cool. Only I show up as being from a neighboring suburb, not my own. >.

I think a good question to ask is, Does anyone really care if he's gay? He never does anything "gay" in the books, so is it a big deal that ...

I just find it annoying that it weakens the books, makes them less able to stand by themselves, and keeps them tied to JK Rowling. :frustration: I agree with Amelia. ...

It's soooo lovely! I especially like the ghosties.

ARGH. I was writing my critique and all of a sudden, for no particular reason, YWS took me to the home page and bye-bye critique. Anyway. Cliche. The premise is ...

Our literary magazine's annual Halloween meeting, the Night of the Living Dead, is this Sunday, and I need a costume. I don't go trick-or-treating, but as an editor, I really ...

CATHARINE: (While dropping her flower into the vase) This is how Momma asked for it. She wanted everyone who showed up to put flowers in the vase, because everyone she ...

Oh, no...wait, where did the pretty French in the beginning go? I mean, I liked the English translation, but the French was so...authentic...

This seems like more of an exercise in vocabulary than anything else. I think I'd be able to appreciate this more if it didn't look like a thesaurus was puking ...

I don't find this atrocious at all...certainly, you could add something to it. Your word choice could have been better, so consider each word and phrase carefully--ask yourself, Is there ...