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Now where did I put that big "cliche" stamp? Cliche. It's a nice try, but doesn't stand out that much. It's like I've read it before, know what I'm saying? ...

The main problem with this is that it's so rushed. This happened, then this happened. It looks more like a treatment for a sreenplay than an actual narrative. Flesh it ...

At my school there is both a literary magazine and a creative writing club. I'm an editor for the litmag, and I've gone to the club before. The litmag, having ...

I definitely agree with all that's been said. Spend more than five minutes on a poem. Honestly, if you're not going to take your writing seriously enough to spend some ...

I think people would be more inclined to critique this if you posted it in sections rather than one huge thing at once. Yes, I admit, I stopped about halfway ...

Where's Pat Buchanan?

This doesn't go anywhere after saying "Hatred is a weed." It's a simple simile, and you didn't really do much with it. It's not very much fun for a reader ...

Seven! Um...fuschia.

I loved the original version, and I love this. Still Walt Whitman-esque. Very good. I take issue with one stanza: But, despite the beauty, I can not share it; the ...

Hey guys, thanks for the comments! smorgishborg - I definitely see what you're saying about the piece being predictable. I thought the same thing myself, but I wasn't sure if ...

I don't think it really worked that well - it looked more like your intestines were diseased and acid was eating at you from the inside out. Yeah...photo alteration tends ...

I'm watching it right now, actually. Commercial break. Anyway, it's a new show that I find clever and, erm, adorable. So, anybody else a fan?

all its glory, as defined by dictionary.com: bloom1 /blum/ –noun 1. the flower of a plant. 2. flowers collectively: the bloom of the cherry tree. 3. state of having the ...

Personally, I've never heard of the phrase 'automaton' before. And understanding that this is a poem about a robot is vital. Couldn't you use a different term (unless you're using ...

I edited the first line, and "automaton" is a fancy word for robot. Thanks! I knew what "automaton" meant...I'm just not sure how a robot fits into this whole "morning" ...