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My god, what is this about? What's the sticky uppy thing in between the two front seats in a car called if it is not a stickshift? Gearshift, perhaps? (I, ...

I saw it yesterday...loved it!

I see you're new (welcome!)--here are just some ground rules. Please review two pieces before you post your own. Please keep the ratio of critiques:new posts at 2:1. That's about ...

You might pass it as a prose-poem. Or just put line breaks in. The piece itself is very abstract, though. A load of abstract imagery won't do much for your ...

This really doesn't have any appeal to a reader. I'm glad you can tell a really generic story using only cliches and poor grammar, but until you can tell the ...

Oh, DD, this makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside...I love the feel, the style of it. The last two lines were a perfect ending. Good job making a good ...

Detail and Characterization. I agree with SeraphTree--too vague, much too vague. When you're writing, you want to get your reader interested. Attached. That's why your favorite books are your favorite

As Trident said, good use of sound...but I don't think the poem has much more beyond that. I have trouble understanding it, and I think this is a result of ...

I based this poor attempt at a poem on a whole village (people included) preserved by lava. Like the volcano erupted engulfing the whole village and when the lave cooled, ...

I agree with Sureal...making people pay to post their work might just result in people making cruddy critiques just so they can post loads of work at once anyway . ...

Ooh, thanks, it's helpful to know that Vista is better on a computer it was designed for...I know that a lot of people have had difficulties with printers. A friend ...

Ha, it is entertaining. I really enjoyed the first stanza of this--it had a catchy rhythm, it sounded good, had a nice punch, though it had some funny syntax issues ...

Granted, but then the government tracks you down and kills you. (I actually have no idea what Assassins Creed is, but the government will often kill you if you discover ...

Pace. That's a heck of a lot of stuff to say in such a short space. We want a story, not a summary. Slow it down. Pay attention to details ...

*tacks Whitman and Frost onto Suzanne's list of poets* I think that you could justify this being in the poetry section--there is, after all, prose poetry. But this as a ...