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Agree with Ayra. This is essentially a list of cliches strung together with no punctuation....great for a Hallmark card or chain-email poem, not so great for more serious stuff. But ...

I agree with dumps are annoying. Why not do the whole scene? It's much more fun (and more informative) in the movies when they do a flashback rather than a ...

Diction. I disagree with linkreborn--I like the use of "stratosphere" because it has a great sound. But yes, "transition" is kind of silly. Pace and flow. I think this piece's ...

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I think the perception of the book as racist actually comes out of ignorance...when Mark Twain was writing, the n-word was not considered vulgar, and Huck is representative of the ...

It really is an analogy, not a story. And I'm definetely try to say something. Several things, in fact. I'm pleased that you didn't come out in the poem and ...

Well, we're all here to help you out. I'm not much for prose, but do you have any ideas right now? You could try re-writing a classic story in your ...

It's an interesting story, but I'm not sure of the merit of the subject...perhaps the analysis of the game of dodgeball would be better presented in a humorous essay. That's ...

I feel as though there is something behind this poem, but you're having a lot of trouble expressing it. It's hard for a reader to get into a poem that's ...

Hey, fellow New Yorker! I'm from Rochester...yes, fun, western NY. Anyway, welcome to YWS! Are you a German student? There are a bunch of people here who are into foreign ...

I'm gonna get this one with my big red EMO stamp! ....*stamps* As a generic modern alt song, this would be just dandy, because, hey, it's written about as well ...

(It's generally not a good idea to put polls on your work.) I think the best thing you could do for this poem is...put it out of its misery. Honestly, ...

"Dad...either I just peed my pants or..." "Or what?" "Or Thundercats are go!" "Did you see this coming when she sat us down?" "Well, yeah, but I was hoping she'd ...

I've never used "Sir" or "Ma'am" but I suppose it's more common in the southern United States....I think I've heard my cousins from Virginia say it before. I think if ...

"That ain't no etch-a-sketch. This is one doodle that can't be undid, homeskillet." Haha, or: "Can we make out now?"