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It's [s]an eensy weensy bit[/s] really cliche. Especially the part about the roller coaster. The problem with cliche is that it doesn't say anything to your reader. I've heard it ...

It seems you're new, so welcome! And it also seems like you missed the Rules . Please read them before you post next time. The poem doesn't do much. Well, ...

If you wanted another critique, you might have PMed someone with a link to the poem rather than asking in guestbooks. The rewrite is better, but it still suffers from ...

It's not really my kind of poem...I enjoyed the voice and the sound very much, and you definitely have a talent for that. I just dislike poetry that's about an ...

The marionette image is way too overused. It's just...no. Just get rid of it. It might be fine to have one line that's like, "I'm like a marionette" or something ...

HAPPY! I completely adore this book. I like Lee favorite character is probably a tie between him and Sam Hamilton, but I like Cal a lot too.

I agree with Snoink; the poem is too vague for my tastes. In general, I get what it's about--the words being permanent, people unwilling to accept what they see right ...

Love the avvie, and the ultrasound pics. You're so brave to do all this, and I admire it. She's one lucky baby to have a mommy like you. Tell her ...

(By the way, I love your avvie. Semicolon, I still need you; I love you!) Diction. This poem is drowning in its own vocabulary! You need way more narration and ...

B'lieve you meant "Coffeeshop" with two e's in your title there. Meaning. What do you want this poem to say to its reader? That "all's well that ends well," Mondays ...

I logged on after being off for a few days and it was like HOLY CRAP THAT'S AMAZING. Nate, you win at life. Can I make you emperor of the ...

I don't know much about politics, and I won't be old enough to vote in the election. My dad says it's going to be Huckabee v. Edwards, and hopefully Edwards ...

BUt all the same, I couldnn't help but feel a little shocked. I think that's why it gets banned a lot...people are like, "Gasp, look how politically incorrect he is!" ...

I don't know if my big red EMO stamp has seen anything this juicy before. I completely agree with smorg. What he said is totally correct (and I'm flattered that ...

Okay, what I was trying to say was while she's in this beautiful place she's still waiting for this guy to come and...seduce? I don't really want to use that ...