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First, take the smileys out. They don't belong there. Second, huh? That's quite honestly the reaction I get from this poem. It's not just the lack of line breaks and ...

I love the poems so far! They're so...whimsical and lovely. MELJA RAWKS! That is all.

The second and third lines don't match the limerick format at all... Other than that, it's cute, even if it is slightly violent. I second Via--she cries before and after ...

"dealed with"? We are not five, m'dear. I agree with Brad...I find nothing new or appealing about this poem. Matt had a good point about the letter format, which might've ...

Hey Eimear! Ditto what Via said about the Rules, and welcome to YWS! Rhyme and Rhythm. I think this poem is held back because it's so juvenile...the rhyme scheme and ...

Hmm...the tone of this piece definitely appeals to me. In many places it has a rhythm to it, and that's something you want in your poetry. It should feel natural ...

The poem doesn't say much to be. Not...anything, really. Know why? It's a cliche. It's "that same old story" told in "those same old words." It reads like a chain ...

Took these of one statue last summer with my film camera. Finally scanned the prints and uploaded!

Nah, cliches don't really make me cry. DO: Make your poem original. Read lots of good poetry. Use interesting images or metaphors. DON'T: Construct your poem from Hallmark cards. If ...

This poem strikes me as a bunch of abstract concepts and very angry words all thrown together. It doesn't strike me as poetry. It seems like you took some sort ...

Now this green heart thing makes sense, with the artichoke...Melja, I do love your style, but I definitely don't like Part Four as much as the others. It's just not ...

Next time, keep it in your journal. The thing is, we as readers don't really care. Why should we want to read about the speaker's failed relationship and her hopeless ...

This is the most worthless piece of crap EVER. No OMG I loved it, I really did, Matt. Snoink, good luck and much...fertility...make pig babies!

I've had glasses since I was seven. I wore contacts from ages 13-15 but I switched back to glasses about a year and a half ago. I started staying up ...

Dude...and you've been here for what, three months? It took me a year to get to 1000 posts, you crazy girl. Ayra = YWS machine. :D