Cade

I wholeheartedly agree with Snoink. I have read Ishmael, and I enjoyed it. But what makes Ishmael good? What you've done here is just list your complaints with the world, ...

I edited your title so that it's not in all caps. Please refrain from doing that; it's not the right way to get attention. You might also consider removing the ...

I'm glad that you addressed this subject from one person's point of view...too often poets are tempted to write about broad subjects, i.e. war and love, in abstract terms rather ...

Wow...did you realize when you were writing this that each line is its very own cliche? Honestly, this is not the way to construct a poem. Not only does it ...

It seems to me like this argument has strayed into a discussion of whether or not homosexuality is a sin, is condemned by religion, etc. This is supposed to be ...

Okay, thanks, Via. I figured I could transfer the songs from one computer to another using a flash drive or something...I've done it on other computers, I think.

So I just got a new laptop, a MacBook. I'm delighted with it. But I ran into a few problems today. They're unrelated, but I still want to know if ...

I find it is sometimes really nice to take a nap after school. I've done that...I'll come home, fall on the couch, turn on Law & Order and then doze ...

You definitely have a talent for using images and sounds to create a strong mood for the piece, and I really like that. But be careful of doing too much. ...

Please leave a comment! Thanks! We're all here to do just that, so there's no need to beg for critiques. The poem feels like the same-old, same-old. It's the cliche ...

As others have stated, it doesn't always go one way or the other. I've always assumed it was a mix of genetics and environment. It's partially a matter of choice, ...

For all our sakes, institute some paragraph breaks! (Hey, I rhyme!) Diction. Watch out for redundancy or unnecessary words. The sun was silently rising Does the sun ever rise noisily? ...

The first is OK...the emotion doesn't seem real, as though the picture was posed, which it was...but I do like the feel of the image, especially the way the edges ...

You lost me after the first line. It's an interesting first line, but what follows doesn't live up to the intrigue of the beginning. This poem suffers from being overly ...

I love it! Simple, elegant, packs a lot of meaning into the short space. It does remind me of Emily Dickinson. Small suggestion - change "the fleas" to "its fleas" ...