Cade

It's a little jumpy and difficult to grasp at for my taste, but the way you have with words is wonderful. I LOVED the first line, just loved it. Excellent ...

5 April If I ever commit suicide— I know, a morbid thought, but hush and let me think—what will it say? I might apologize to my friends and family; I ...

I'd rearrange the April 4th poem--start with the speaker. Move "Out here...I seem to be the only person" to the beginning. It's a more interesting exposition than the noncommittal "The ...

Aww, Suzie! You make me feel warm and fuzzy inside. I actually hated that poem. But now it seems like an ugly deformed puppy that I was going to kill ...

Thanks for the comments. I'm already tearing my hair out. How on earth will I survive to the end of the month? Anyway, so I'm being not-like-everyone-else and posting my ...

Hmm. I like number 7 more than I like 8, I think. I love the way it begins, with the wood that looks like a fox...I think you could bring ...

I disagree, I think the repetition gets uncomfortable toward the end. I'd take out the last series of 'three'. I really like the inclusion of gold, frankincense, and seems like ...

I'm going to lock this, as you also posted it in the NaPoWriMo forum. Please only post your poems for NaPo in there from now on, and welcome to YWS! ...

Next time I'd suggest getting a little closer and moving yourself around. Here there's a great big shadow running through the middle of each picture, and it's really distracting!

"Can a kiss could quiet"? Unless you were trying for some sort of weird play on words that I'm not getting...this is as bad as you writing "your welcome" on ...

Hmm. I don't care much for your April 1 poem. I recognize the reference in the last stanza--were you trying to write the poem around that? I think the analogy ...

I should be giving you a better critique than this, but: Nix 'to and fro'. It sounds so...yuck. Doesn't match the tone of the poem at all, and taking it ...

I love the voice in this poem; it really brings out the close relationship between the speaker and the subject. I especially like the attention to detail with the writing ...

Gadi and others - thanks for the input! PVC pipe, by the way, is that really common plastic piping that's probably used for a lot of things in your house, ...

Midnight Vampire - no, they don't. They can be about anything! We're just offering some suggestions. :D