Cade

I disagree with Phorcys - the rhyme is what makes this poem entertaining. It's not supposed to be serious, really, is it? The first stanza is fine; it draws the ...

Basically, I second everything bubbles said. I do like the imagery; you do a great job at describing the feelings, but I also need something a little more concrete to ...

I liked that it rhymed, but the rhyme wasn't consistent. I would like it if you put lines 3 and 4 together, as well as lines 5 and 6. That ...

I thought of Chionophobia, too, but that's probably because I've just been reading it. This poem didn't impress me as much as some of your others. It's well done and ...

I feel like I get good responses the first two days after a poem is posted, and then it just kind of dies out. I do like having a quantity ...

A Tale of Two Cities by Charles Dickens, for English class. I rather dislike you, Charles Dickens. And, of my own choice, East of Eden by John Steinbeck. I was ...

I disagree. I don't think that the rhyme has choked this poem; it is a bit stretched in some places, but the poem reads like a ballad or something. I ...

Hmm. It's not much that's new or brilliant, but it's well-constructed and flows nicely. Is the title "A storm is Brewing"? If it is, I would suggest changing it to ...

Changed! Thanks for the advice. Well, I don't know if the change is what you were looking for, but it's no longer "bubbled". I was surprised that people had an ...

Oh, how creepy! This is very strong. The rhyme doesn't make it sound childish or silly; it seems to make it even creepier. Her plump legs hid under a too ...

"I'll buy the moon and I'll go to the city with it!" -Jackie What is at the end of the rainbow?

The United States government will say that the Iraqi court tried him and found him guilty, but come on, we were hanging over their shoulders the entire time. I don't ...

My, that's bizarre. The long, opening paragraphs really didn't do much for me. You spend more time than is necessary telling the reader, "By golly, I'm in a boat and ...

My cousin and I roamed the boardwalk. Tourists. Not many would have guessed that we're related: She, round edges and yellow curls, blue eyes laughing at the way her hips ...

Oh, I'm so pleased to see these two characters interact! It seems like they're old friends from college. Jonathan is getting married to Sarah, but it's awkward because Kyle used ...