Cade

Your story has a fine meaning, and flows well, erm, except for the grammatical, spelling, punctuation errors, etc. I enjoyed the message, though. The ending was fantastic. I have always ...

This is good work; I could really connect to it. Everything from "We walk barefoot" on was just great. The melodic whispers of the swaying reeds, drunk on the dew ...

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All: This poem is about getting tattoos. Best, Bad God, it makes so much sense now. I didn't realize that when I read the poem. Perhaps it wasn't obvious enough, ...

I second basically everything BFG said, especially the part about trying to take on the world with one poem. Try to focus on just one moment in time, one step ...

Everything the Barenaked Ladies have sung since about 1995, probably. :D Edit: And most of Rent, yes. And Wicked. West Side Story...

Granted, but you'll accidentally be given all the wrong tests. I wish my sock didn't have a hole in it.

-Turn sixteen -Get a job or internship *crosses fingers for publishing company or newspaper* -Do one puzzle a month with my best friend (it's kind of a hobby...we're currently working ...

I'm so pleased to see things finally coming together! Yes! Connections are made! “Tomato, tomato…” I assume he's doing the thing where people go to-may-to, to-mah-to. I'd like it if ...

I agree with Clau on the rhyme-rhythm stuff. I think you have some really interesting phrases in here, and then some...not so interesting ones. This piece would be much better ...

Would you like the red ones or the purple ones?

"Bull in a China Shop" and "Shopping" by Barenaked Ladies

Ha, what I've always found interesting about astronomy is that the things we see are so far away they could be completely different now, because what we're seeing now is ...

I knew when I read the title that this piece was going to be cliche. It's a nice message, but I agree with mandax; you could definitely be more subtle. ...

Ooh, shivers. I completely approve of the theme and meaning of this poem, and probably most of the phrases. Line/stanza breaks: Okay, just stanza things, really. I'm all for having ...