Cade

This entire poem is sexual reference. Instead of explaining your poem in a response, try putting it actually in the poem. I have no idea how this is about sex. ...

I just read about this on NYTimes.com. Great thing to do, eh?

Sophie - I changed the "in". I kind of like it up there on the line before. Thanks for the comments! Colly

Dated.

Front.

I can understand that police were just trying to be cautious, though. I mean, if there were sketchy things laying around that didn't look all that much like bombs and ...

Thanks for the reply. It's actually not a beginning, it's just meant to stand alone, although I see where you're coming from with that idea. Regarding the "You're ruining the ...

Piggy.

It was of those November mornings when I wished I had remembered gloves. The air wasn’t quite bitter yet, but my fingertips were numb, thrust inside thinly lined pockets. My ...

I really liked the rhyme here. It was very un-forced and enjoyable. I say take out the ellipses, first of all. Putting them in either makes the piece sound drifty ...

Granted, but now you can only speak Russian and you have to go live in Russia for the rest of your life. I wish my fingers were just the teensiest ...

Damp.

Burning.

Granted, but the principal moves in next door. I wish I had some cheesecake.

*eye twitches* I'm amazed I got through this. All the tabs and spaces...unnh, I couldn't handle it. These mostly seemed to be rambling phrases that didn't really...go anywhere. Some of ...