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Ooh, nice. I like how the title is so simple and explains a rather cryptic poem. I felt that the rhyme wasn't quite...obvious...enough. Of course, rhyme should be subtle, but ...

Oh, Lewis Carroll. I'm not looking for any specific type, I just don't really want to see old stuff that's super-long and hard to just read. As in, no Paradise ...

Snoink - I'm a poet. I don't add more. I suppose that if you want to add more you end up writing it on the wall in your sleep. The ...

Where is the sunlight? On this anniversary of my own first kiss.

I've seen plenty of poor, idea-drained writers say, "HOW do I get ideas for what to WRITE?" It's a scourge on literary society, this inability to think of something to ...

So what do you do if you love it and find everything perfect? Describe why you like it. This forces you to look at the story critically and very often, ...

I'm sure there are plenty of women who could do a better job than Dubya. Hillary? I don't know. She may not be the right person, and it's highly unlikely ...

As an atheist, I can't legitimately comment here, I suppose. I've always viewed religion as a way to live life. Guidelines, perhaps. I know that I have my own beliefs ...

Finally, snowday. Listened to Frank Sinatra and slept in real late.

I'm sure she's adorable! Thing is, the descriptions here are kind of commonplace. She's cooing, twinkling, precious. We've heard it all before when people talk about babies. And then, the ...

I know that threads are a colloquial term for clothes! Still, terms like that are generally reserved for first person narratives or dialogue. Pushing through the tangled mesh of wreckage ...

For my Creative Writing class, I have to paste 10 poems in my journal and respond to each one. I'm wondering if you guys have any favorite works you think ...

Colleen, too, likes to talk in third person. Colleen would like to welcome Zen to YWS. *evil laughter* Colly

I agree with Chibi, punctuation would be nice, but first I think you need to seriously reconsider what you're doing with this poem. Though I sympathize with people who are ...

Oh, yes, I agree with Brad! I was going to tell you to erase the last stanza entirely, but I see he got to it first. I am, however, opposed ...