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I think it meant that the dancing with the ball and chain was causing the heart to race. The subject's face was not making the speaker's heart race. Colleen

The Problem: you are reading too much into the poem. What I am saying is not beneath the words--it's already on them. The tricks the poem mentions all have this ...

Well, I realize that...never mind, I can't write anything coherent right now. Lastly: I spoke earlier of the poem's struggle to work like a trick. The crux of this is ...

Ha! I love Stephen Colbert. And it's really great that he's donating the proceeds to good causes. "Bringing balance back into the freezer..." LOL! I think I shall go locate ...

One could also consider "chionophobia" to be "the fear of snow," instead of the novel I am working on. I think it works in a number of ways. Yeah, but ...

I thought the yellow hydrant was a child, sitting there in frozen snow.

Ooh, I love photography, too! One of my dream jobs is National Geographic photojournalist.

I didn't say that you left nothing to the imagination. I just think some subtlety would be nice. Describing the actions in a way that leaves nothing to the imagination ...

I really wasn't that helpful, but you're welcome. Yeah, I'm terrible at rhyme, too. You could try rewriting this in free verse.

I liked reading something that doesn't sound like what I've read of Brad's poetry. I think that the poetry in the first person is much more effective than this was, ...

SNAP! I like this. It has that mystical shivers-up-spine but really-intriguing kind of feel. Hehe, I used to be in a magic club in middle school - our advisor was ...

Granted, but that person took "burn" a little too literally... I wish I could go for a bike ride.

I didn't really understand this but the description was great. It was at a perfect length. I actually felt like I understood this too much. I mean, the part about ...

I feel as though this poem is a prisoner of its rhyme. Rhyme, though forced, existed, but the rhythm was iffy at best. A lot of the phrases in here ...

Saying this poem is short is stating the obvious. Short does not equal bad, though. I feel, though, that you could've fit so much more in here. Yes, it needs ...