Cade

This poem seems to be a prisoner of its own rhyme. I think a better attempt on this idea might be better made in free verse. Other than that...gaah I ...

Oh, yes, some of the best ideas are at night. I couldn't fall asleep last night, so I did math homework until 3:30 AM, wrote some poetry, and read East ...

Well, I suppose if everything ended happily it would be rather boring, and end up just making people feel sorry for their own miserable lives, while the beautiful lovers in ...

*is a puny mortal* *bows down* Interesting subject line indeed! Welcome! Colleen

Granted, no amnesia, but now you can't memorize the lines. Looks like you're stuck. I wish I had a pet gorilla.

Granted, but the bulb's blown out. I wish I could make a sweet 7-minute documentary about Rasputin.

As Claudette said, the images were great. I could really catch the mood and tone here. Regarding the "know he knows" - is the first "know" really needed? That sentence ...

Interesting imagery, but I found myself unable to take much away. I feel as though this is something I've read before. I think perhaps the images of the first three ...

Granted, but the critique is so nasty that the lining of your soul falls apart and you walk around like a zombie for the rest of your life. I wish ...

Granted, but now that's all Germany's full of, and my neighbors can no longer host cool German exchange students, thus depriving all my high school of their awesome German-ness. I ...

Where did the cold go? Forty degrees and I'm still in shock. Need my shades.

Yes, Chapter Two! Gosh, I love your writing, Cam. I really like how you've gotten into the character of Andrew. He's so vulnerable, and as a result, likable. This chapter ...

That felt...off. Looked up uncertainly. I don't like the word uncertainly. Well :) that is probably the most meaningful word in the poem (given its subject!) so removing it might ...

*shakes head* This didn't do much for me. This is just a list of disjointed phrases. It does achieve a certain tone and feeling, but I couldn't visualize it and ...

Mmm, this poem was delicious! It was quirky, kind of beautifully so. The voice is great; you did a good job of speaking to and interesting the reader. I got ...