Cade

"...and you never truly knew the greatness you were"? That transition is awkward. It might work if you just took out the "and" and made it: In the hush of ...

Oooh, good questions, Snoink. Like Sureal, I don't like the idea of an abortion simply because characteristics of the child aren't desirable. I guess I would mostly apply this to ...

Fascinating stuff! I love how the characters can talk about something as deep as God and still have interesting, realistic dialogue. Now, normally I'm all for nice short prose pieces ...

Thanks, guys! I know this is far from my best work. The first two stanzas are boring, aren't they? I think it's just that the images are too conventional. I'm ...

Granted, but now that's all you can do, and talking becomes awkward when you have to do it with a melody. I wish I had better shoes to go with ...

I agree with Claudette in that is isn't much. What should I, the reader, take away from this poem? Who is the speaker addressing? What happens? Does the subject die? ...

Cadmium, after some reflection, the eyes reference does seem slightly off-topic, but it was originally meant to symbolize how the "heartbreaker" failed to see how they were perfect for each ...

He’s brushing his teeth beneath the yellow bathroom light, thinking Liberace, thinking Village People. Was that really necessary? Fantastic edit! :D Colleen

I'll cry if it's not a monkey. Will he have a cute hat?

*makes fish face* Hi zurr...I can't tok like zis.

Granted, but you would've become really sick and had to go home and completely embarrassed yourself anyway. I wish I had purple hair.

Would he understand love once more, its wraith-like fingers around your throat? "Your"? Who is the speaker addressing? That was sudden and out of place. small knife sounds I bet ...

Granted, but the copy is broken. You can buy it on super-clearance... I wish I knew how to do this stupid solubility lab.

Whatever it is, it should be SHINY.

I adore the parasol! Yeah, the first girl's left hand is really awkward. The fingers are held strangely and I think the arm is too long.